Score: 10

"BREAK THE PENCIL"

submission: Girlchan in Paradise Ep2

date: September 1, 2009

That's just awesome.

Dragged on a bit with all of the needless shouting and nonsense spouting, but it was brilliantly done overall.

I can't wait for more.

Score: 7

"Good, but needs lots of work."

submission: Phoenix Ash Opening

date: August 26, 2009

Very good, I have to say, but a lot of negative points.

To begin with the positive - your drawing is very good and you seem to have an interesting premise here.

Now on the negative - Animation could have been a lot smoother, and it was almost nothing like an opening. The animation of the bike going along was too bland and nothing like how a bike would actually move.

Short and sweet scenes are in openings, some of those scenes just dragged out a little bit. The animation didn't really suit the song used, so you'd need to work on that. For that song, you'd need a lot of fast-moving scenes with a fair bit of action.

Also - Enchanted Arms much? If you haven't played the game, fair enough, but if you have, that's just blatantly copying it. The main character in Enchanted Arms has an arm that looked exactly like the one Phoen had at the end.

For your first time animating, that is absolutely incredible. It seems like I'm just being a hypocritical ass here, but I'm giving you constructive criticism. I do understand this took a lot of effort and well done for doing it.

Score: 10

"Brilliant."

submission: Cooking Sama

date: June 10, 2009

I really loved this. Brilliant.

I think more dialogue would be nice, considering the voice acting was incredible.

I'll have to guess that the author isn't great at English, judging from the description, so I'll keep it simple.

It was really good. It really made my day. I was laughing the whole time I was watching it. I liked the KonataxKagami bit. I laughed really hard at the cat's nose bleeding at the tentacle rape part. Thanks for making this.

Score: 7

"Not so great."

submission: An Unfortunate Girl

date: June 3, 2009

VA is too bright and cheery. The girl's voice was far too happy to be a mopy little girl with a disease. The story seems very good so far, you just need to show it slowly instead of firing it all in at once. The beak-mask guy at the end, well, he sounded far too nice to be performing some form of evil operation to implant a disease or something, the boy wasn't even a character, his voice did not suit what he looked like at all.

Was somewhat good, but needs a lot of work. Dialogue wasn't incredible. You do need to learn how to write better.

Score: 10

"FUCK"

submission: Street Fighter Collab

date: May 30, 2009

Holy flying hell, this is incredible. Some parts were better than others, but overall it is fan-fucking-tastic.

I loved hearing Egoraptor's awesome voice.

Score: 9

"Definitely good."

submission: Koden X Prologue Part 1

date: April 23, 2009

Nice work.

Has the potential to be brilliant. Story seems a little cliched so far, but it's as good as other similar stories.

As someone else has said, I think subtitles would be nice.

Animation wasn't great, movement was definitely odd, but otherwise good.
Music and sounds were definitely very good, and voice acting was fine.

Score: 9

"Funny."

submission: Twilight: The Broodening

date: March 25, 2009

Honestly.

You've saved me the hassle of watching that piece of bad filmmaking and terrible storywriting.

I thank you from the bottom of my heart, bro.

This was funny and insulting to the story, so well done.

Score: 9

"Brilliant."

submission: Don't Look Back

date: March 23, 2009

That was very very good. I enjoyed that. For your first flash game, this was brilliant. I hope to see a lot more from you.

It had a very simple concept. The ending actually made me go 'Awww', because I realised what it meant.

If I'm not mistaken, the game was about a man going to collect the soul of his loved one to put it to rest. Once he finds it, he makes to bring it back to its body so it can depart properly. Either that, or to resurrect her. This ends what appears to be the man's soul going to rest along with his loved one's. That would leave his dead body standing. That, or it could have been the man's imagination that he did all that and it didn't happen at all.

A lot deeper than it appears.

I read about Orpheus just now after seeing the other reviews. I wasn't far off the mark, was I?

Score: 10

"Awesome."

submission: Go, Go, Parody Rangers!

date: March 20, 2009

Waaaaiiit.

The sound effects when the robots appeared + combined... They sounded like they were from Mischief Makers (N64 game, quite possibly the best platformer ever). I loved that game so much.

This was brilliant. Very brilliant. I liked the 'That's what she said!' bit.

Score: 9

"Good advice."

submission: Unleash Your Imagination

date: March 17, 2009

Very detailed and very good. Didn't read through it all, but the originality section was great and the 'STORY IS EVERYTHING' strikes me, considering that's how I feel about a lot of things. When I play games, I'm looking for an engrossing experience that usually comes from the story. When I watch something, it either has to have an amazing story, be insanely funny or have the best action ever. I prefer stuff with a touching story.

If it wasn't for the fact I have little patience and I'm terrible at drawing, I would use this as a guide to animate. I'm more of a story-writer than an animator.

The originality part is still very helpful to me, thanks.